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I am sick.
I am wrong.
I am a sinner.
I am a threat.
I am a defect.
I am immoral.
I am mutated.
I am a pervert.
I am shameful.
I am abnormal.
I am unnatural.
I am shameless.
I am disgusting.
I am distasteful.
I am compulsive.
I am destructive.
I am sacrilegious.
I am promiscuous.
I am a delinquent.
I am blasphemous.
I am incompatible.
I am just not right.
I am an abomination.

I should be saved.
I should be healed.
I should be converted.
I should be condemned.
I should be hospitalized.
I should commit suicide.
I should be punished by death.

I have a sexual disorder.
I have committed a crime.

I am not what you say I am.
I should not be who you say I should be.
I have not done what you say I have done.
I will not be who you say I should be.
I am who I say I am.

I have an amazing personality.
I have an open heart.
I have an open mind.
I have aspirations.
I have dreams.

I should not have to be afraid.
I should be treated equally.
I should not be oppressed.
I should not be criticized.
I should not have to hide.

I am not a criminal.
I am your daughter.
I am your neighbor.
I am not diseased.
I am not a sinner.
I am your friend.
I am emotional.
I am optimistic.
I am beautiful.
I am an artist.
I am amazing.
I am a fighter.
I am creative.
I am natural.
I am human.
I am honest.
I am caring.
I am sweet.
I am not ill.
I am loving.
I am proud.
I am moral.
I am smart.
I am loyal.
I am gay.
I think it is pretty self-explanatory.

Critiques not encouraged.

(Better viewed centered)

Edit:

I moved a couple of the stanzas around.
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Shad0wf1re Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2010
Amazing.
But i think uou missed one.
Apparently anyone who is bi or gay is going to hell.
Just lie me :D
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2010  Student Interface Designer
Thanks for the comment. :)
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PristineAndPutrid Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
This, is plain out amazing.
I've never read anything like it, but I love this.

Well done.
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thanks hun. :]
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billxmaster Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2009  Student Photographer
u should of put i am gay at the end... but thats just me :P
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billxmaster Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2009  Student Photographer
i see a perfect point to this :] u never stop amuzing me
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superupaman Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2009  Professional Traditional Artist
At some places it sounded too much.. If i may say unwanted, but indeed you're not what anyone says you are.. ;) so it doesn't really matter (if it really doesn't) whatsoever and whosoever says about what you've written. But i'd say it's never bad to take constructive criticism...We must be open to learning. Btw it was a good read. There are many sad things in the first stanzas and that eventually hit a mind so hard and pours out a gallon of liquid emotions..many questions..but i think if you really don't care.. It's no point asking them..nevertheless one thing i must say.. Never suicide.Nor does let anyone force you to do that.
Like your confidence though. Good write. Appreciated. Take care dear.
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009  Student Interface Designer
The reason I ask for no constructive criticism is because it's a pretty emotional piece for me. And the negative things are what makes it. I've had some of these things said to me directly. In fact, my roommate's mother hates that her daughter is living with a queer and wants her to get a roommate change strictly because of it. These negative things do happen. You may ask questions if you wish, but I just wish not to get criticism on the piece itself.

Thanks for reading.
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superupaman Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009  Professional Traditional Artist
It's your write and your right to decide if you deny any sort of criticism. That's no problem. And moreover if it's an emotional piece (which every piece should be for an artist) then i completely understand it, and respect your decision. So i'm not saying anything about it in that sense. I know it was an intense write.
My questions were rather connected to you, not about the write. If i may ask dear.. Is there anything i can do to bring a smile to your face, i'd love to.
I could read the rage.. the wrath.. I wish things will be sweet for you dear. My blessings to you.
Feel free to share, anytime.
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009  Student Interface Designer
A smile is always within me as I know they only ridicule because they are not as privileged as I to lead such a diverse life.
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superupaman Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2009  Professional Traditional Artist
It's good.. Take care dear. Be happy.
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Ytaker Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2009
Hm? Your father/neighbour/friend has asked you to commit suicide, and thinks of you as a sinful mutant? Unlucky, and statistically and biologically, wrong. It's nice too see your self confidence in yourself, as well.

These sort of things never impact on me much though. Are you really kind, are you really a good friend?

Which is why, when I see on your front page that you're demonstrating your love for friends with that trip to NYC it's cool. And your, photography anti depression course thing, and your runescape charity. I have a runescape account too. With, 1000s of coal pieces and rune crafting material things.
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thanks for the comment :]
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zanate-pirata Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2009  Professional Digital Artist
I love the way you write it all, the way that the words are in order, and the visual shape it makes the whole script.
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thank you very much. I think you're the first one to actually comment on the aesthetics of this piece rather than the literary content. :]
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NovaStarX Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009
It is amazing
It is flawless
It is one of the best and most emotionally saturated poems that I've ever read. It'd deserve a Super Fav if I could do that... :)

You have a truely amazing gift with the pen. I love this piece so much. I'm sending it to all of my GLBT friends... which is currently three at the moment... :blushes:

I hope you haven't been launched out of some type of religion... :( I hope that you find something to believe in and take no heed to those that would put you down or try to conform you...
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thank you so much for the kind comment. I was born and raised in the Catholic community, which has made it a bit harder, I do believe. But I've never experienced serious hatred. Granted, I'm not out to most of my community. Just my family, closest friends, and school.

I do believe something is out there... There has to be.. But what?
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NovaStarX Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2009
Well, I do have a bit of a different theology of Christianity, but still greatly believe in the trinity. This group of three exists not in scripture or rules, but within one's own heart. No one can tell another what to believe or how to believe. It is the individual's job to find their spirituality and do things for the greater good of all, not to persecute and shove their own ideals down peoples' throats. It's interesting, but without my own homosexuality, my religious beliefs would definately be mundane. Instead of being torn from God, the opposite has happened. I can now see the hypocracy of certain clergy members and what the true message of the religion is... Love one another as you would love yourself.

I hope that you still believe in something... :( I wouldn't leave my faith for anything. :)
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2009  Student Interface Designer
I'm honestly not really sure what I believe in... I hope one day to figure that out.
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NovaStarX Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2009
Me too... :)
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2009  Student Interface Designer
^.^
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dolphin64575 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful! love the concept!
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thank you so much!
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TracyBandit Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009
:3 I totally agree. Personally, I am bi, and my family is of the oppressive religious persuasion. I know how you feel. :hug:
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Yeah, religion can make it really hard. My mother took it a lot better than I thought she would, but I know because of her religious background that she never will accept me the way she would if she didn't have God in her life.
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TracyBandit Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009
exactly. But they gotta love us atleast a little, right? It's a mommy thing
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009  Student Interface Designer
I know my parents love me. But I also know that they are disappointed in who I am.
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TracyBandit Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009
Meh, who cares what they think. As long as you like who you are and are proud of yourself, that's all that matters. :3 And I love you! :heart: :hug:
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Lol thank you. But, unfortunately, what other people think can really hinder other's lives.
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TracyBandit Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2009
Yeah... but try not to get too down. :3
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2009  Student Interface Designer
I don't let it drag me down. I rise up because of it :]
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Arlishan Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
This made pride beat in my heart. The text is so simple and maybe because of that, the message strikes directly like an arrow.
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thank you for the comment!
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OfTheWoodsStudio Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
This is great:glomp: we are behind you :)
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Student Interface Designer
^.^ Thanks.
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OfTheWoodsStudio Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
NP:)
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2009  Student Interface Designer
:]
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XxSkittlezxX Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009
This is beautiful. :]
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Aww thank you :]
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XxSkittlezxX Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2009
You're velcome. :aww:
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009  Student Interface Designer
:]
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Bella14 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009
Hell yeah. Really gets the message through.
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thank you so much!
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Tagath Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is just great. And true.
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thank you!
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ChibiDyne Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2009
awesome
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thanks :]
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NoDayButToday93 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2009
This is wonderful and deep and just full of hard emotions that people shouldn't have to deal with, but do and it's hard, but...I'm rambling. The point is, is that your poem is beautiful. :clap: Brava.
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iluvwritin Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009  Student Interface Designer
Thank you so much!
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HisokaYukiko Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2009
I think it's one of the best poems I have ever read!
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